Descriptive Writing - Lesson 5 - Writing to Describe Worksheet

The task presents two descriptions of a holiday in Majorca, each painting a picture of a beach scene but with differing levels of detail and language use. In the first description, the scene is set with a simple statement: "The sun shone in the sky." It continues with straightforward observations of children paddling in the sea, the sound of waves crashing on distant rocks, and the tactile sensation of sand between the toes. The narrative concludes with a personal resolve to swim, inviting the reader to imagine the scene through direct sensory experiences.

Conversely, the second description employs more vivid and descriptive language, enhancing the imagery of the setting. The sun "blazed down upon the white Spanish sands of Puerto Pollensa," immediately evoking a more intense and specific visual. The use of the location name, Puerto Pollensa, adds authenticity and allows the reader to pinpoint the setting. The description of people enjoying the sunshine and children splashing with "squeals of delight" adds life and movement to the scene, while the phrase "waves crashed against…" suggests a continuation of action beyond the text. This description is arguably more effective as it uses descriptive language to create a more immersive and engaging experience for the reader.